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Liberlitatia wrote:

That was an awesome piece of writing, although I thought that the dialogue was slightly formal. I'd think that people would speak more casually. Not as in using a lot of slang, but just being concise with their words. (Except for Deran's speech, because...I mean, you do have to persuade arrogant Imperials by acting arrogant yourself.)

1. Thanks! I’m happy you like it. Have you also silently read the other chapters of Origins?

2. That was intentional. It’s to show how different these five people are from normal people: they’re so single-mindedly focused on taking out their anger that they don’t really take the time to develop any kind of relationship with each other beyond “ally” or “associate.” That will change in the future, though.

3. Yes, and another part of it is that acting confidently in front of someone (Jia) who has enough firepower to kill your team could make her think you’re more powerful than you seem.