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Wubdich wrote:Both two excellent pieces of writing. Good job.

Only, Kathol, it repeats 'The Commando' too often. But that may just be me with my preference to have all sentences start different.

I am quite glad you liked my writing enough to call it 'excellent', what tone and implication do you think did this factbook give off about how my nation deals with the issues of extremism and free speech?

Velvets realm wrote:I am quite glad you liked my writing enough to call it 'excellent', what tone and implication do you think did this factbook give off about how my nation deals with the issues of extremism and free speech?

I am glad that such a might Nation as your son share our ideals.

Velvets realm

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*comes back for a last check*

Bunnies wrote:(I also don’t know if [natio/n]Kathol Rift[/nation] would be interested in this? If you’re not, sorry for pinging you!)
Usually when authors try to slip into the mind of someone in third person they let the pronoun hang like this, “The commando was given a chocolate cake after the integration, a sugary treat that was frosted to perfection. The cake floated on the tongue and—oh! The texture gliding from one side to the other—it is truly divine, how could anyone make something so tasty? There must be more somewhere, anywhere! Maybe the chef’s around...”
I mean, how Kathol wrote is was good too! His way leaves more mystery in what the Commando might be thinking and is probably better for that whole “feral” feeling.

Velvets realm wrote:I am quite glad you liked my writing enough to call it 'excellent', what tone and implication do you think did this factbook give off about how my nation deals with the issues of extremism and free speech?

Sorry, I'm too sleepy to react to your two's post right now. And I must head to bed.
I'd like to take apart some points of your writing, Velvet, but my situation is as stated. I can tell you tomorrow though

battalions from Alpha Bravo and Alpha Charlie are nearing completion!

Bucre wrote:Hey guys I made a factbook about bucres history hope u like it

It was well written. Your nation is also in 1915 tech, yes?

Bucre wrote:Hey guys I made a factbook about bucres history hope u like it

Genghis Khan, Timur the Lame, etc: Tens of thousands? Gotta step up your game man, those are rookies numbers.

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I'm back

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Mestovakia wrote:Genghis Khan, Timur the Lame, etc: Tens of thousands? Gotta step up your game man, those are rookies numbers.

And these aren't the only points I would tear apart.
Like, Winged Hussars against the Ottomans maybe?

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Bucre wrote:Ok thanks I'll change it

Please don't murder more people

Mestovakia wrote:Genghis Khan, Timur the Lame, etc: Tens of thousands? Gotta step up your game man, those are rookies numbers.

why... are you encouraging him?

I just compared my mine and Bucre's nations together. Turns out I am the better in all the right places and worse in all the bad places. :)

Wubdich wrote:*comes back for a last check*

Sorry, I'm too sleepy to react to your two's post right now. And I must head to bed.
I'd like to take apart some points of your writing, Velvet, but my situation is as stated. I can tell you tomorrow though

Alrighty then, have a good night sleep then Wubdich (assuming its even night time there in Germany).

Rockemsockem wrote:why... are you encouraging him?

If he's gonna say his chap was one of the deadliest madlads on the planet, he better have a tally to back it up.

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Rockemsockem wrote:why... are you encouraging him?

There's more to say about his Factbook that I'd tear apart, but I'm heading to bed so I'm leaving that job to Mesto.

Velvets realm wrote:Alrighty then, have a good night sleep then Wubdich (assuming its even night time there in Germany).

(It is. 3am to be exact.)

Anyhoo, I'm really going now

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Bucre wrote:Stop lying,we're very similar

And I'm better.

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Mestovakia wrote:If he's gonna say his chap was one of the deadliest madlads on the planet, he better have a tally to back it up.

Even now it's pathetic. Also really killing tens of millions in the late 5th century? He killed more than 10% of the population and conquered the world? That's not very believable, especially uniting the world under one ruler. Also, even tens of millions are pathetic compared to us.

Mestovakia, Velvets realm, and Alantic empire

So I have British, Italian, German, and French Battleships and Battlecruisers memorized. I have most Japanese and some US memorized.

I would do carriers but there were around 200 commissioned before and during the war. I would do WW1 Battleships but there were much much much more.

Send help please I beg of you

Mestovakia wrote:And I'm better.

sometimes, i forget just how big you are.. and then i check and almost have a heart attack..

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Right, here are my criticisms of the factbook, Bucre

Punctuation. The factbook is badly punctuated; it's just one continuous sentence.

Vagueness. You just covered over a thousand years in one sentence.

Powergaming. Just how did your guys overcome the established nations and tribes of the age?

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